Purgatorium by Damien Michael Aulsberry - Short, Dramedy - Sometimes, death can be just luck of the draw. 12 pages - pdf format

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Dear Damien,
there's a couple of end of line typos on P1 - of and room. It seems to be a bit of a complex set up to get to the "imposter" twist and I was hoping for more drama over the recalcitrant 6/9. The transitioning of "Black balling" into a white was a neat touch.
I was a tad discombobulated by action Fister but dialogue Augustus (one in the same) and the twist ending was shocking.
Best JtF

Hi jtf!

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. I find it so helpful and will take on board what you said.

Thanks again!

Best

Damien