Chuck Spunt in Puberty Pains  by  JtF    Based on The Chuck Spunt series  By  John Stone
Comedy, sci-fi, thriller of 74 pages.

Following the recent assassination scare, Englishman Charles "Chuck" Spunt has to step inside the body of Prez Trump to fulfill alien commands. With one of the world's most powerful men not-at-all himself - what could possibly go wrong.

Comments and suggestions please.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17T9U8kgz8JfPtvvTH0b061uLtSFwx1Nz/view?usp=sharing

Dreamscale - I just had to include the TV glued to backside scene !! P29
?? Kev ? The thread was deleted - Thanks for the Spy magazine info. Scene included P43

This is hilariously completely zany, and a cracking read JtF. Your descriptions are creatively amazing, along with the crippling dialogue . How did you even get to this point of structure. This beats Saturday Night Live.

I never had Chuck down as sexual guy, quite the opposite, but you've brought something out in him that completely contradicts his character, obviously due to Hillary and her orbs.

You certainly found an angle with the merge of the two twats. I just think DT is suffering a bout of baby tantrums. IT'S INSANE!!!

Hi, JtF.

I stuck with this for around the first ten pages or so but had to call it quits.

It's a mostly crisp read, although the description tends to be a little overboard.

This Chuck Spunt character has never felt especially compelling to me, which is always going to be a problem. Much of it relates to the dialogue — it's reminiscent of a school play, if anything, and notably indulges itself.

For instance, the class roll call definitely belabored a simple point.

The central question I have is this: who is the script aimed at?

It feels old-fashioned to me — very old school Brit radio comedy ("Why, my good man, I'll have you know...") with a dash of a rare Monty Python miss — but with contemporary topics.

Maybe I'm just not the demographic for it.

Thank you both.
I agree this would be a "hard" sell - maybe a British Animal House in a private school setting. My initial idea came from a comedy sketch where Rowan Atkinson reads out funny names (with comedic timing) I think one name was Wibbell . . . and this morphed into a schoolboy smutier version.
Writing the Hillary Clinton character - in every way Trump's opposite - was a delight. When the truth outdoes art, it's almost impossible to overstate - -
By way of sub-plot I did attempt to inject a harder edge.
I felt sorry from Chuck not (as John writes) having any sugar in his life so indulged him. I loved the idea of his muse (and later wife) being not wafted from Paradise but Luton airport (a very famous 1977 Campari television commercial in the UK).
What really is seen as truth? Why should we BE truthful ?
This is what can go wrong when you are not.
All best - JtF

I remember the Campari com very well JtF and also the sketch with Rowan. It is difficult to recreate what’s gone before us even using a different slant. I think I couldn’t get into that myself and found a difficult read. I think DB was correct in his comments above though regardless of his thoughts about CS. I still think this script has potential as comedy shorts and that is where I would go with it myself. Best

Quoted from JtF I felt sorry from Chuck not (as John writes) having any sugar in his life so indulged him.

John Cleese has stated more than once that Basil Fawlty's behavior is the result of sexual frustration.

It's difficult to successfully emulate something from an earlier era.

I'm curious JtF. Did you ask John if you could write this based on his character CS? Or was it a complete surprise for him? At first I thought this was a collaboration between the two of you.

Curiosity killed the cat. Hehe…