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Posted by: Don, April 30th, 2023, 8:06am
Broke-Ish by Shawn Doc Decker  - Short, Comedy - In a world of social and financial turmoil, a married mixed-race Gen X couple navigates the challenges of raising a blended family of Generation Z's, while struggling to maintain their professional status and come to terms with the sacrifices they made in pursuit of the American Dream, all while grappling with the complexities of wokeness and a widening generational divide. 26 pages - pdf format

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Posted by: kcranford, May 2nd, 2023, 9:27am; Reply: 1
Shawn, I gave this a read and found the entire thing enjoyable and engaging.  At its page length I would think it is written as a half-hour sitcom script, but not sure if that is your intent.  There are some laugh out loud moments - my favorite is from Amy: "I'm like an onion, if you peel me I'll make you cry."  That's great stuff and very fitting for her character to voice after your set up of who she is.  Also, I have to say that the character of "Nancy" is my spirit animal LOL - you've given her some great one-liners as well.  As I've voiced on other reviews, I am the "story content" girl, I don't delve in much on format and technical issues, because I'm no expert on that.  Others are always good to chime in with their expertise on these things, although I didn't pick up any glaring errors on any of that.

All in all a very enjoyable script, hitting on some very timely issues, and although in real life some are very serious, lightening them with a comedic touch seems to make them more bearable.  Thanks for a fun read and for sharing here.  Wishing you much luck with this!

Kathy
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