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SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board / Short Dramedy Scripts / Tea Next Tuesday
Posted by: Don, January 3rd, 2024, 6:25pm
Tea Next Tuesday by Chuck Conaway - Short, Dramedy - Boss visits employee recovering from surgery, meets his wife and something happens. 3 pages
Production: Short script. Mountain house location. All day-time scenes, four roles; two females, two males (one male has no dialogue).
For production consideration - No comments required
Posted by: D.A.Banaszak, January 8th, 2024, 6:50pm; Reply: 1
This had an interesting twist. I don't want to give it away but when you placed the folks behind the wall, I wondered, "Wouldn't it be funny if..." I was delighted with the ending. I felt like you knew what I was thinking and indulged my humor.
Very clever. I love endings that leave me to imagine and decide what happens next. In this case, it's pretty clear and I don't need to be told.
Also, I like your character descriptions. With very few words, you paint a clear picture of each of them. I can really see them as they enter the story. It's something I need to work on.
Posted by: LC, January 9th, 2024, 1:18am; Reply: 2
Hmm, this was not quite as effective for me, cause the ending is essentially a visual punchline, after what came across to me as quite the buildup.
An inconsistency with the two-months/six weeks lines too.
Posted by: Stoneyscripts, January 10th, 2024, 10:46am; Reply: 3
I like this. Very thought provoking and lighthearted.
I like the wool blanket idea, it made me chuckle.
Not a lot else to say really, except good writing that gets straight to the point.
Thanks.
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