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Hannah's Demons - Filmed (currently 8833 views) |
Nomad |
Posted: July 24th, 2016, 10:14am |
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LocationSouthern California Posts721 Posts Per Day 0.15 |
Warren,
I'm glad you like it. It's made from 4 separate images that I compiled in Gimp and then added the text and fog.
As far as your script goes: I have nothing to say that hasn't already been said.
It's good, needs some work, fun read...etc...etc.
Keep up the good work.
Jordan |
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Reef Dreamer |
Posted: July 24th, 2016, 3:57pm |
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Old Timer Part time writer
LocationThe Island of Jersey Posts2612 Posts Per Day 0.56 |
Hi warren
Had a quick read. I think this is a different version to the original.
Nice flow and quick tempo. Overall a sound short. A few images seemed well used, such as hiding under a table and being grabbed, but it could work.
I felt a little dissatisfied with the end but the twist of the Hunter - note I would have a capital H on the hunter if that's what you have called him - being the saviour is fine. I would almost bring in her having hallucinations early on but suggest it's because of her state - ie bloodied and beaten - which we later discover is her illness.
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Warren |
Posted: July 24th, 2016, 5:21pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Thanks for the read, Jordan and Reef Dreamer.
You are correct in thinking this is a new draft. It may still undergo a few more changes, that will be discussed with the producer, before filming starts.
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Warren |
Posted: August 10th, 2016, 7:13pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Pleased to announce that Hannah's Demons has been picked up for production again.
This time by multi-award winning director Tyna Ezenma.
It is set to be produced before the end of the year.
This was picked up through STS so a big thanks to the reviewer Mitch Smith and Janet for everything she does for all of us. |
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eldave1 |
Posted: August 10th, 2016, 7:46pm |
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January Project Group
LocationSouthern California Posts6875 Posts Per Day 1.92 |
Pleased to announce that Hannah's Demons has been picked up for production again.
This time by multi-award winning director Tyna Ezenma.
It is set to be produced before the end of the year.
This was picked up through STS so a big thanks to the reviewer Mitch Smith and Janet for everything she does for all of us. |
excellent! |
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Warren |
Posted: August 10th, 2016, 7:51pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Thanks, eldave.
It's all getting a bit surreal. |
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Zack |
Posted: August 10th, 2016, 8:14pm |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4507 Posts Per Day 0.68 |
Congrats Warren. I'll help you celebrate by giving it a read. ~Zack~ |
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Warren |
Posted: August 10th, 2016, 8:27pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Thanks, Zack.
I know you are looking for reads. Anything in particular you want me to have a look at? |
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DustinBowcot |
Posted: August 11th, 2016, 3:21am |
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Congrats... you should message Bill Sarre as she has made one of his shorts too. Inner Journey. I just found out by checking her IMDb. |
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Warren |
Posted: August 11th, 2016, 4:34am |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Thanks, Dustin.
Yeah I noticed that when I checked her IMDb.
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Zack |
Posted: August 11th, 2016, 8:45am |
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LocationErlanger, KY Posts4507 Posts Per Day 0.68 |
This one was right up my alley. I liked it. Simple story of a victim being chased by a villain. Good suspense and the descriptions were spot on. I should take notes. Lol. Dialog was good, though there wasn't too much characterization. This is more than forgivable seeing as this is a short. My only real complaint is that you tell us that the woman on the phone is Hannah's mom instead of revealing it organically. Nit picky, I know. Good read though. Looking forward to seeing what else you got. And congrats again on getting produced. As for a return, anything in my sig is good with me. Final Girl is actually a little similar to this script. ~Zack~ |
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Warren |
Posted: August 11th, 2016, 10:13pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Thanks for the read and positive comments, Zack.
Never have to worry about being nit picky with me, I like to be told how it is and I do the same in the comments I give. No point sugar coating. A lot of it is subjective anyway so writers can take it or leave it.
I had a quick read of Final Girl. I think on the outside they are similar but the stories at the core couldn’t be more different.
Lets be honest, the beaten/bloody girl being chased through the woods, taking shelter in a house/cabin/whatever has been done to death. It’s more how it plays out and what twist you add to that scenario that makes it less cliché. When it comes to the directions we took our scripts, they are really very different.
I will make more thorough notes on the Final Girl thread when I get a chance. Probably over the weekend.
Thanks again. |
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Warren |
Posted: October 17th, 2016, 8:22pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Hannah's Demons has found another home.
For some reason this seems to be the script that keeps on giving.
Script has been taken down until the end of production, at the request of the producer. |
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Warren |
Posted: February 16th, 2018, 7:31pm |
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Of The Ancients A man who has taught his mind to misbehave
LocationSydney, Australia Posts3897 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
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SAC |
Posted: February 16th, 2018, 8:19pm |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3208 Posts Per Day 0.78 |
Sweet, Warren! Looks good. |
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