To be honest, I had no clue what was going on here. But reading the comments, I think I get it now... sort of. People prank hardware stores by asking for fake items? Or send kids to stores with fake shopping lists as a joke? I'm hearing these things so they must be true. I guess I learned something.

I like Gary and Irish Eye's idea about having it turned around where he fulfills the whole list.

It made me smile, so good job with the humour. I had hoped for a button on it, something to punch up the ending like it was his friends pranking him or a parent who called to wish him luck but couldn't resist pulling his leg, something to give it a story. Or if the final thing was something genuine but sounds like it's made up and he hangs up on the guy and then the supervisor comes over asking how he's doing and the kid learns it's a real thing...

It's a decent entry, it just needs something more.

I actually don't mind the caller telling old jokes... it shows what a dick he is. The humor could then be in the newbie's (unknowingly) witty replies, eg the spirit level bubble: Would you like that bubble-wrapped? Or air-freighted?.

It just needs more of a story-line... and a more satisfying ending.

The concept itself is good and the script is well-written... definitely something you could work on and have some fun with.

All the best.

Right of the top, I'll try not to reiterate other’s suggestions/observation.

For me, the problem is that the idea isn't in any way new, a running joke in need of a new pair of sneakers. It's a short so you're allowed to have a tomato surprise ending, but it should be fresh tomato. If that makes sense. Good effort though. My thoughts may not jive with the writer or the peanut gallery.  Feel free to stick more pins in the voodoo doll.-A

Writer,

Left handed screwdriver! Ha. You had a decent set up, but it turned out mostly to be a quick skit. Don’t know where else you could have taken this. As is, it’s cute but doesn’t pack much of a comedic punch.

Steve

Simple prank call story. Short and sweet. Innocent humor. Well written. Meets the challenge. Great job.

Michael is a total jerk, picking on the hapless new guy. Which is not  a bad way to go if the new guy can manage to turn the tables on Michael.

Thanks everyone for the feedback.

I worked for a store called B&Q, the brits will know it.

So many kids, apprentices sent there for random requests.  Always wanted to use it in a story.

Quoted from irish eyes I'm in construction 22 years, heard these over and over and over. There need to be some sort of story or turnaround... It would work better if the new guy was able to provide everything or at least say he has everything in stock. Not Bad good job on entering

Great feedback Irish Eyes.  It certainly will turn the tables.