Great premise but it went a different way than I thought.

If you make them older, and have Ruben/Anton come in the room, lusting, right? Then poor Darcie’s pill hasn’t kicked in yet but Anton doesn’t care. Darcie tried to stop him but to no avail. End it right there with her muffled screams from outside the door and you have a nasty horror. It’s brutal but it works. Anyway just a suggestion.

A good sparse script with cool concept

Good concept. I enjoyed that.

Anton and Elka - sounds alike a couple of strictly come dancing !!

That the pills makes something go wrong is hardly unexpected, but in a way that’s fine. The addition of elka at the end is a good twist, despite it meant to happening.

I think it could do with a polish in dialogue and the scene playout but every script does.

Also keeps to the criteria, horror, suspense, low budget, contained.

Well done

Feel like all this dialogue is stuff they would have discussed prior to possessing the pills.

Fish belly skin?

This syrup is confusing me.

I like the overall idea. Not sure I like the story. A Pill that temporarily changes you is cool though.

Oh and this would obviously be kinda expensive with all the damage being done.

Love the idea of a pill that temporarily transforms your body. But this one didn't quite do it for me.

The writing isn't bad, though I think you could be a bit more descriptive. Dialog is pretty bland.

Good effort here.

Well, that was fun. My only issue in regards to the challenge is this occurring in the near future/our lifetime. Don't think so. Regardless, liked the concept and banter. A quick and easy read. Really enjoyed it, thank you for entering.

Nice work. Good luck, writer.