No Life Without You, Rosanna Dream by Jessica Candy - Mobsters visit a nightclub performer about a debt, unaware that he is a practitioner of the black arts.  Short, Horror

Writer,

Interesting take with the ventriloquist bit. For some weird reason I've always found those things creepy. I think it's got humor and wit-- not the laugh-out-loud kind.

The writing and dialogue were excellent. Although I the interaction with Hector and Rosanna was a bit mushy and poetic for my taste, but it works here... another strong entry,

All the best,

Ghost

Wow, a necro-illusionist!

I get the feeling this might run quite a bit longer than as written. Perhaps a Feature length is in order...

Just the right amount of Lynchian dreamscape v reality mixed with a good dose of Noir to keep me engrossed. Some of the dance/poetic sections could be edited a little or intercut.

This is a highly creative and very entertaining entry. Would lend itself well to a Sin City or Love, Death & Robots style of filming.

P.S. I'm curious about the Peter Gun reference.

I really liked that story.  Second one in the challenge that really felt like a Twilight Zone episode.  I feel very sad that he lost Rosanna.  Well told.  Very well told.

P.S. - I thought the transition from Rosanna the doll to Rosanna the woman on the dance floor was perfectly written.

This is probably one of my favourite OWC reads to date. I love ventriloquist dummies, any story with them in and I'm totally in.

This was wonderfully written throughout, the opening scene with Hector, Lon and Rosanna, I thought was terrific.

My only couple of nitpicks -- Don't know why you used I\E for the closet scene slug and wasn't entirely sure of Rosanna's form in the final scene, she seemed very active for a dummy or whatever she was at that point lol.

Really enjoyed reading this one and would equalling enjoy watching it all play out on the screen.

Agree with the Twilight Zone vibe on this.  I somehow missed the "Talisman" reference in my first read, so was a little confused at the end, but picked up on it my second read-through.  Really well written, and imaginative story here.  The fact that you got through the entire first verse of "Beautiful Dreamer" is definitely a credit!  Very nice entry - thanks for sharing!

This had a Twilight Zone feel to it. I could see myself watching this late at night.

I took pity on Hector and Rosanna.  I liked the dream sequence part but disliked the sad ending. Rosanna is reduced to .....

Shakespeare said that a sad ending is better than a happy ending. We face lots of stress every day so I prefer a happy ending to make us feel better. Certainly, it's a matter of opinion.

Michael

Me reading..."sleeps a brunette ventriloquist dummy." Okay, now you've got my attention.

Then..."I'm a necro-illusionist." THIS is going to be fun.

And, it was.

Expertly written. Way outside of the box. My favorite moment was "You ain't even real."

My only nit is that the mob angle isn't as creative as the full idea, so it drags the overall feel just a bit. But, everything else was right on the money. Well done.

Paul

Really enjoyed this, well written and very creative.

I think it might have lost me a tiny bit towards the end, but that's probably on me.

Good effort.

Hey writer.

Very well written with a really unique and great story. Hector was a great, interesting character.

The relationship with Lon and the past event wasn't well fleshed out and the mobsters were a bit too cheap for this otherwise great story. But overall it was very enjoyable.

All the best