Writer,

There’s a lot to like here, but I’ll start with the bad. Character descriptions should be toned way down. Elipses elipses elipses! Way too many of them, for Chrissake! Soon as I saw the full moon outside I knew exactly what was going to happen. That said…

This is a great premise and, if handled differently, would be an awesome script. A few tweaks here and there should get this in really good shape. I hope you do. It’s worth it!

Steve