Hey Dena, Good writing, an excellent dark tone, great characters but… I didn’t get it! Sorry. Obviously just me because I seem to be the minority here. What was Barnabas all about? I honestly thought he was going to be some saving grace but Monica ended up in the electric chair in the end. I guess on the other hand he could be considered some false prophet of a better life and that is what he offers people. If that is the case then this needs to be better established in that opening exchange – did Monica actually ask him to kill Cain? I thought she played it well or you did the author by making her likeable with the whole “who am I to judge” and giving money to bum even though she’s short of a buck. I guess I wanted a happier ending but what did I expect from you…birds tweeting and our protag walking away into the sunset! You’re normally an author who does deliver the more bittersweet ending. Not bad but I didn’t follow it if I completely honest. This is probably more on my part though. Great work for an OWC. |