Karma by John Stone - Short, Comedy - Roger gets his comuppance when he over indulges on sweets. - pdf format

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My favorite line was when he proposed chewing chocolate covered raisins for his mother if she couldn't chew them herself.

This is the proper definition of Karma.

As a comedy, this has promise. The characters seem like good material to work with. They need more pages to spit out more funny lines. Suffering a near death event like cardiac arrest is funny when it is treated casually like Roger did. Still, as nice as this was, I think Little Red Hoodie was funnier.

Thanks for your comments Michael. I think prefer that one too.

Karma-
See, whatever we do wrong in this life, it will always come back and bite us in the bum.



Percy Filth-
I liked the drama with the taxi driver about being attacked and could be left to die. This is pretty much what my younger brother would say when he gets a paper cut.

Quoted from frank j Karma- See, whatever we do wrong in this life, it will always come back and bite us in the bum. Percy Filth- I liked the drama with the taxi driver about being attacked and could be left to die. This is pretty much what my younger brother would say when he gets a paper cut.

Very funny Frank. Yet another case of a karma based story.