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I wasn't that fond of this story. It didn't hava real western flavor to it. There were a couple of points that led me to believe that it was Dr. M. as he mentioned he was new to the genre. Anyway, this story could've taken place in any small town today. It was a nice dramatic piece, but it came up short in the western department.
Finally getting a chance to make some self-indulgent comments on this one. Frankly, I was a little nervous about putting this one out there. Glad nobody had a problem with it.
* The whole lesbian angle was my wife's idea, actually. I pitched her the assignment and "lesbians" is the first thing she said. (Yeah...I am not sure what to make of that either). So I typed it up and showed it to her, and she was like, "Um...that's not really what I had in mind." * I cheated a tiny bit. "Gold-Tooth" is a character who shows up in the next episode of Starbuck Starr. His name is really Coyote. This part of his backstory (get it...backstory?) is completely new, however. * Hey, Brea -- I told you before I thought our styles were a little similar. I was pretty amused, and had a hard time holding back last week. I hope you were more pleased than chagrined at all the speculation... * About the title -- plenty of people probably know that "paramour" is an actual word, but if you don't, you should check your dictionary.
Anyways, glad that most of you liked it. I had more fun with this assignment than I thought I would at first.
The first draft actually took the end a little bit further, but that was edited out pretty darn quick, and I suspect that I don't need to justify to anyone why that was trimmed....
* The whole lesbian angle was my wife's idea, actually. I pitched her the assignment and "lesbians" is the first thing she said. (Yeah...I am not sure what to make of that either).
Hey, Brea -- I told you before I thought our styles were a little similar. I was pretty amused, and had a hard time holding back last week. I hope you were more pleased than chagrined at all the speculation...
How could I be chagrined to be compared to such a quality writer? Though, I have to say I could maybe see people thinking I wrote the first part but the last part? Whoa, Nellie!
Bert, man, it was a primourously short script I've ever read in this Westerns! Congratulations! Well written and descriptive piece! How about something like Jessie&Geri feature movie, huh?
Yeah, I read Starbuck Starr and I've think about that you would insert Geri and Jessie inside a spaceship travelling throughout the universe looking for trouble...The time of these type of couple has come - Brokeback Mountain don't let to lie!
By the way, Starbuck Starr is another good work written by you!
Bert, I was thinking about your two heroines what makes us to realize that Geri and Jessie are lesbians...Just because the collection of carved phalluses? My dear grandmother has many of them and she is strait woman!
Bert, I was thinking about your two heroines what makes us to realize that Geri and Jessie are lesbians...Just because the collection of carved phalluses? My dear grandmother has many of them and she is strait woman!
That's an excellent question, Helio. I would've never thought of them as lesbians if it weren't written in the logline. What's the deal, Bert?
I would've never thought of them as lesbians if it weren't written in the logline. What's the deal, Bert?
Are you sure about that? The way they dress, the book titles, dabbing the perfume behind Ophelia's ear...and there's other subtle things.
I had Brea's point in mind, too. I think something too explicit would have resulted in some attacks on this piece -- and that certainly wasn't what I was going for.
I tried for the middle ground here -- and only had a week -- and even without the logline, I think the reader would still be, like, "hmm...do you think...?"
Are you sure about that? The way they dress, the book titles, dabbing the perfume behind Ophelia's ear...and there's other subtle things.
I had Brea's point in mind, too. I think something too explicit would have resulted in some attacks on this piece -- and that certainly wasn't what I was going for.
I tried for the middle ground here -- and only had a week -- and even without the logline, I think the reader would still be, like, "hmm...do you think...?"
I don't know. It's hard to say whether or not I would've picked up on any of those subtleties since I knew they were lesbians from the getgo. I agree a graphic lesbian sex scene would've been distasteful and probably would've been too over-the-top coupled with the ending... err... conclusion (there we go). But still, I think a little flirting or something of that nature might have conveyed the lesbian bit without spelling it out completely.
Anyway, it's a great script as is. I have few quibbles with it. I just thought Helio brought up an interesting point.