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big lew
Posted: October 26th, 2022, 8:25pm Report to Moderator
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With the back of my hand pressed to my forehead, I'm in a dither, but I must say...FUNNY!

Love the intended over acting and the threat of a diabolical toaster. Clever reveal for Joseph.

I dread to think what would have happened if the refrigerator was possessed!

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Zack
Posted: October 27th, 2022, 3:08pm Report to Moderator
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This is a good one. Funny stuff. Writing's great, short and punchy. No complaints here.
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irish eyes
Posted: October 30th, 2022, 4:01pm Report to Moderator
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A pisstake like the old days

Short and sweet. At one point I was trying to figure out when Joesph died ??

It was well written and creative.  
Not sure it met the parameters of the OWC but pisstakes rarely do  


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steven8
Posted: November 2nd, 2022, 11:44pm Report to Moderator
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Oh boy, this is the most fun and best reviews I think I've ever had.  Thanks for taking the time to read and review.  I do these OWCs when they really strike my fancy and then write them in one sitting like a guy with his buddies on an all-nighter in college.  Laughing at any and all in-jokes I can get in there, etc.  More than likely that's why I always land in the also-rans, but what the heck.  

A few things:  Manscaping is about more than just 'down below':

https://www.themodestman.com/what-is-manscaping/


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The overt Scooby Doo references and covert ones (characters named "hanna" and "barbara") are kind of cute.


You saw it, and soooo close, but look at all the names and totally connect the dots.


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(what’s with the bolded name? Is that a new thing?)


It's a shot, and the accompanying dialog is O.S.


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I bet you someone will hit you up and ask for permission to shoot it. In fact, I wouldn't mind myself. It's a fun little piece.


You're more than welcome if you like, Grandma Bear.  I'd be proud!!

Last but not least, I'm excited to have raised the public's awareness of 4 SLICE TOASTERS and HIGH QUALITY MARBLE COUNTERTOPS.  I feel they've been badly neglected for far too long.




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DrFrank
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Loved this story. Perfect example of not taking yourself too seriously and focusing on entertaining your audience. If you can make your reader laugh, then you know that whoever watches the final film will laugh even harder.

Your writing also is very to the point and deliberate, no fat. Something that I'm trying to develop in my own writings.

Thanks for participating!
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steven8
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Loved this story. Perfect example of not taking yourself too seriously and focusing on entertaining your audience. If you can make your reader laugh, then you know that whoever watches the final film will laugh even harder.

Your writing also is very to the point and deliberate, no fat. Something that I'm trying to develop in my own writings.

Thanks for participating!


I'm glad you liked it.  Thanks!


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