This was fun and well-written.

Admittedly, I do share the gripe about the Devil being such an "everyday man" to the point where it feels like some old grump that is dressed up as the Devil for Halloween. I just wonder whether if your Devil lived on a Street named "Hell", in a hellish castle amongst a number of other hellish properties, it would've helped me buy into who he actually is. And the sheer audacity of the children to trick n treat on that road may have added some fun narrative.

However, if this was some dude who just thinks he's the Devil, that is really funny. I just wish it could've been affirmed or hinted.

Good enjoyable stuff, nevertheless.

I really liked the premise and feel it has legs but there's no pay-off. He's the Devil but so what? It doesn't factor at all into the story.

Maybe having him do some magic or flexing a little bit of his strength would make it work.

6 pages is really tough to write but I think the ending could be better.

A VERY WELL CRAFTED Devil who has given up his old ways. Laughterd out lound many times at the characterizations of the Devil and the kids.
I wouldn’t have minded a taboo ending with the kids destroyed in some gruesome way, with the Devil calling his therapist, “ah, guess what?"

Funny stuff and after reading your story, that old devil
could easily be me. I totally identified with him. I agree
that the ending needed a jolt.
If that old devil still has some fire in him, he should
decapitate those jerky kids, then set up their heads on
a porch table with a sign that reads: No F----g Candy
For You. then he could go back to watching Tv and eating
Devil's Food cake or some shit.
Great fun overall. Look at all the comments you got!

After the opening scenes, I went into this with high hopes.  Great set-up.

But then it just kind of plods along.  Some of it is cute, but if you're going to use the Devil ("yes, that Devil"), then you maybe shouldn't go 100% conventional.

He needs a moment to shine.  Here, your devil could have been just anyone in numerous iterations of this familiar Halloween scenario. I mean, I get that is kind of the point, but it seems to be the only point.

I liked this alright, but wanted more from it.