This didn't work for me and I blame the set up. Jess did everything to get
Mark into that creepy house, even when he balked at the idea. As it turns out,
that house is home base for blood-letting. Hmm.
Once inside the house, the story goes straight for the throat. It's only 3 pages, so
I think you got caught short on time or something.
Maybe Jess should set up Mark. She might be the perfect witch at heart.
We need some female characters to give the male monsters a run for their money.