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Posted: January 3rd, 2024, 7:25pm Report to Moderator
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Tea Next Tuesday by Chuck Conaway - Short, Dramedy - Boss visits employee recovering from surgery, meets his wife and something happens. 3 pages

Production: Short script. Mountain house location. All day-time scenes, four roles; two females, two males (one male has no dialogue).

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This had an interesting twist. I don't want to give it away but when you placed the folks behind the wall, I wondered, "Wouldn't it be funny if..."  I was delighted with the ending. I felt like you knew what I was thinking and indulged my humor.

Very clever. I love endings that leave me to imagine and decide what happens next. In this case, it's pretty clear and I don't need to be told.

Also, I like your character descriptions. With very few words, you paint a clear picture of each of them. I can really see them as they enter the story. It's something I need to work on.


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Hmm, this was not quite as effective for me, cause the ending is essentially a visual punchline, after what came across to me as quite the buildup.

An inconsistency with the two-months/six weeks lines too.


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