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Redundant elements in all of these? (currently 1010 views)
Nomad
Posted: October 4th, 2024, 3:47pm
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INT. MOLLIE'S HOME - SIMON’S BEDROOM - DAY Posters of Leeds football club adorn the walls. Xbox controllers lie on the floor. Daylight creeps in from the edges of the drawn curtains. This is how I would write this opening while avoiding saying "bedroom" twice.
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Drongo Bum
Posted: October 4th, 2024, 6:46pm
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Exactly. It's all about understanding the purpose and function of the different elements.
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Desmond56
Posted: October 10th, 2024, 11:34am
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Yes Zack. I doubt any of these including LC has ever produced anything. Not with his eye sight.
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JaydenRose
Posted: October 10th, 2024, 6:09pm
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By redundancy, DB means repeated words: INT. MOLLIE'S HOME - SIMON'S BEDROOM - DAY (SUNDAY) The bedroom is very boyish with posters of Leeds football club. The room in reasonably tidy. Would just be:INT. MOLLIE'S HOME - SIMON'S BEDROOM - DAY (SUNDAY) Very boyish, posters of Leeds football club. One might call it reasonably tidy... at least for a teenage boy. INT. POSH FROCKS FACTORY - FACTORY FLOOR - DAY (MONDAY) The factory has rows of tables with sewing machines. Behind is a room with a door and glass. INT. POSH FROCKS FACTORY - SEWING FLOOR - DAY (MONDAY) Behind the rows of tables with sewing machines, a DOOR. Do you understand?
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JaydenRose
Posted: October 10th, 2024, 6:11pm
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Yes Zack. I doubt any of these including LC has ever produced anything. Not with his eye sight.
Is English your first language?
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Drongo Bum
Posted: October 10th, 2024, 8:09pm
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I doubt any of these including LC has ever produced anything.
It just stands to reason.
Hey, out of idle curiosity, have you ever read any screenplays besides your own?
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Zack
Posted: October 10th, 2024, 9:57pm
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Yes Zack. I doubt any of these including LC has ever produced anything. Not with his eye sight.
LC's a chick, so...
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Drongo Bum
Posted: October 11th, 2024, 12:08am
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LC
Posted: October 11th, 2024, 12:40am
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Yeah, I can't for the life of me fathom why people want to defend, deflect, and do anything to win an argument, instead of take on or at least consider advice being given.
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Drongo Bum
Posted: October 11th, 2024, 1:00am
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Yeah, I can't for the life of me fathom why people want to defend, deflect, and do anything to win an argument, instead of take on or at least consider advice being given.
Don't tell me what to do, LC!
You're not the boss of me!
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Matthew Taylor
Posted: October 11th, 2024, 6:31am
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Feature 42.2 Two steps to writing a good screenplay: 1) Write a bad one 2) Fix it
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Zack
Posted: October 11th, 2024, 12:19pm
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Wait!PULLS PANTS UP. Matt! Come back!
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Matthew Taylor
Posted: October 12th, 2024, 7:15am
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Wait!PULLS PANTS UP. Matt! Come back!
Just for you zack
Feature 42.2 Two steps to writing a good screenplay: 1) Write a bad one 2) Fix it
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