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This sort of comedy is not my thing at all but I found the writing to be great and very easy to read and did make the whole experience a pleasure. So even though I don’t like the story, I really like your style.
Witty dialog between Satan and The Reaper and some other scenes were clever and funny as well. But that song... eesh, on a loop. I felt for Satan and the audience lol. Just kidding. It's fine the first handful of times you hear it, but... I guess I've heard it in too many movies now. Anyway, nice song choice for a title. Good job.
Oops, this is actually the best song of the batch. I erred in an earlier review, glancing too quickly across the titles.
This writer has a style that I enjoy. Quick throw-away lines that -- while not entirely filmable -- still manage to flesh out their vision. There is a subtlety to the humor going on here. But then, all of a sudden, the subtlety is lost with a far-too-literal use of the song in question. I really enjoyed the first two-thirds of this one.
First of all, I enjoyed this, it's my type of humor. A little bit depraved, a little bit deadpan, a little bit visual humor. I can tell this is a British/Australian effort just by the spelling of tons so I can see where the humor comes from.
Like Bert, I think I was best with this until he got to the part where he performs the title song. I don't know that referencing the song word for word helped that much, but I'm willing to overlook it just because I like the rest. Good effort on this one.
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“Reaps”. Great renaming of a character. Loved it. I can’t say the story is my brand of humor, but it made me laugh anyway. I even found myself feeling sorry for the Devil (is that a sin. Overall, we’ll written, creative and entertaining. Great entry, writer. Thanks for sharing!
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Great song choice. Like the purgatory opening. Your writing style is good, but when Satan continues to speak after an action scene he is continuous, same applies for aside, otherwise we get lost in the mix.
Hitler sitting on Churchill's arse gave me fits.
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Dear god, the visuals. Just too much in all the best ways.
Nothing more to add.
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South Park, Devil May Care, and a few others may have beaten this to a fair bit of the style and a good number of the jokes, but it's still funny. Excellent descriptions of Hell and its denizens, some funny lines, solid writing throughout. "Reaps" is very funny.
The idea of Hell as performative drudge work for Satan is funny and could yield a fuller story about Satan's life. Would be nice to see the story of Satan actually trying to make a change in some way. Essentially this is a story about status quo, and it'd be fun to see him try to break out.
I like that the CD player was built into the cave. I'm not sure why the FIGURE couldn't just be identified as REAPS from the start of the script. It took me a long time to realize that it was Reaps and not Re-aps. What a weird name, I told myself, Re-aps. And then it dawned on me. I guess I had a hard time following this one in general.
I enjoyed your script. I haven't heard this song in a long time. I didn't notice anything I could point to in your writing. I laughed when Satan threatened Adolf with Churchill. It was clever to get the lost souls entranced and loving eternal life with the rock concert only to see their bubble is about to burst. He is the master of manipulation. Well done.
I got the jokes and I could see the direction you were going in. It’s hard to be funny in a script. The humor here would be dependent on the performance of the actors.
The minor format issues have already been addressed. I also had a problem with some of the slang names (like Reaps) and figuring out who they were.
In my opinion, the Devil would need an over-the-top performance from somebody like Jim Carey to make this work. Otherwise, the frustration and grief suffered by the Devil wouldn’t be enough by itself. I did find this to be a fun read though, with a creative interpretation of the afterlife.